The Loser's Club

On the night of their Centennial Homecoming, a group of high school misfits, self-named “The Loser’s Club,” put their revenge plan, “Operation Get Back” into action by kidnapping the two most popular students in their small West Texas high school and putting them on trial for “crimes committed against their fellow students.” OGB is about to kick some serious butt!

Drawing from films like Booksmart, Love Simon, and Mean Girls, THE LOSER’S CLUB seeks to turn the tables on the proverbial school bully and place vengeance firmly in the hands of the bullied.

THE LOSER’S CLUB is the feature film adaptation of my one-act play of the same name. The screenplay has won 32 Screenplay Awards and honored by more than 80 other Screenplay Competitions and Film Festivals from around the world.

The Loser's Club Reviews

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GREENLIGHT COVERAGE

Script Score

1. Character Development: 8/10 – The main characters are well developed, with distinct personalities and backstories that drive their behaviors and interactions. However, some secondary characters could be more fleshed out.

2. Plot Construction: 9/10 – The plot has a clear conflict and builds tension well, culminating in the “trial” scene. The storyline is cohesive and moves the narrative forward effectively. A few scenes slow down the pacing.

3. Dialogue: 9/10 – The dialogue sounds natural for the most part and gives insight into the characters. Each character has a distinct voice. Some exchanges are a bit lengthy.

4. Originality: 8/10 – The concept of outcast students putting popular kids “on trial” for bullying is fairly original. However, the archetypical high school cliques and dynamics are familiar territory.

5. Emotional Engagement: 9/10 – The bullying and isolation the “losers” face makes them sympathetic protagonists that the audience connects with. The reveals of Tawny’s and Joe’s backstories also draw empathy.

6. Theme and Message: 10/10 – The themes of bullying, acceptance, and defining one’s own self-worth resonate strongly. The message about respect and inclusion comes across clearly.

Overall rating: 8.5/10

FILM FESTIVAL CIRCUIT – HOUSTON COMEDY FILM FESTIVAL

Overall Score: 82/100

Judge #1: The screenplay captivates with its nostalgic portrayal of the high school experience, a time universally relatable to most. The vivid descriptions effortlessly transport the reader into the world being depicted. Calvin and Joe are particularly standout characters, adding depth and intrigue to the story. I am eagerly anticipating the possibility of seeing this engaging script brought to life on the big screen.

Judge #2: This is a well written story that comes across like more of a dramady and then a full-on comedy. Judging from the title, I get the “Breakfast Club” vibes and influence. A full 118-page 2-hour film is a bit long for a comedy as well, but there is a lot to tell in this story. The screenwriter does a good job of creating a central plot that revolves around these three outcasts forming a bond in an abandoned classroom they dub “The Loser’s Club.” Here, they find solace and strength in their shared experiences and friendship. The characters are well developed and relatable, which I believe is the core strength of this film.

Los Angeles Comedy & Screenplay Festival The Loser’s Club

“The Loser’s Club’s strength lies in its human approach to each of its flawed characters. The writer understands the many intricate layers that a teen can possess, and never falls into tired tropes that are often so used to dehumanize this category of humans, who is so easily misunderstood. The dialogue has personality, and there’s an abundance of solid moments scattered throughout the script that are worth highlighting. As a premise, this feels fresh and exciting, given that more often than not, the “losers” in teen films, either remain passive, or get their revenge as individuals. The idea of a group of kids standing up for themselves in this manner seems much more realistic and on par with the teen mentality, nowadays. The actual trial takes a big portion of the script, which works to its characters’ favor, because it allows the audience to truly connect with each and every one of them. The writer also manages to provide humanity to both Tawny and Joe, even if it takes a while for them to let their guards down and become more vulnerable. On the other hand, the “losers” aren’t all painted with the same layer of victimhood, either. Trenton brings a knife with him, while Luther carries a cap gun. Though they don’t aim to actually harm any of their peers, it’s obvious that both characters carry something a bit more complex within themselves.”

Austin Screenplay Competition Review The Loser’s Club

“The Loser’s Club works primarily because it pairs great fundamentals in the presentation and structure of the narrative with wildly creative characters. In a script that has a fair share of surprises, the most interesting thing was the cast regardless of how large the role is. Every character has such a memorable personality or description that it makes the whole narrative appear highly original even though it adheres fairly rigidly to conventional three act structure. However, this adherence is to the narrative’s benefit as the highs and lows of the story land at the appropriate times. Out journey of change may seem familiar when laid out clinically, beat by beat. But the characters have enough personality and often more than enough complexity to their motivations to give The Loser’s Club real distinction. The Loser’s Club succeeds because of fantastic characters and solid structure. These two qualities make for the bedrock of any good script, but this narrative has a lot of other positives on top of this. Ever escalating tension, some great moment-to- moment writing in the action description, creative dialogue – these all add up to give the impression of a very professional script. I enjoyed my time with this story because it swings for the fences with interesting plot points but gives us a reason to care about the action with nuanced characters. A good read from beginning to end. “

Houston Comedy Film Festival Review The Loser’s Club

"The early ratings from the judges are very high for your screenplay. You're off to a great start. This screenplay is very well written and defined. You did a great job of creating so many different personalities with all of these characters. This took some planning!"

Slated Review The Loser’s Club

“The Loser’s Club” is a coming-of-age comedy that follows a group of high school students who kidnap their bullies when their school does nothing to punish the bullies. This premise offers a rich foundation for conflict to unfold… …each character has a distinct personality and the ensemble’s relationships with one another are rendered realistically. Dialogue is consistently conversational and the action description is evocative and memorable. Scenes build tension effectively, which allows for developments to unfold in satisfying intervals.”

Diversity Film Festival & Table Read Screenplays Review The Loser’s Club Expand

“This is a really interesting script that mostly centers around a single moment of confrontation between bullies and their victims. It’s quite a strong concept but feels rooted in reality – a group of friends pushed too far and perhaps to their limit. The failure on the part of the school is tangible in their reactions to Trenton’s retaliation, but it’s much less explored and we instead get a single extended scene that provides some of the most in-depth exploration of childhood bullying ever put to screen (well, script), exploring both bullies and their own take on the events just as well as those of the ‘losers’… this was a genuinely interesting read, and something that I can’t recall ever being explored in such depth before.”

Atlanta Screenplay Awards The Loser’s Club

“The core premise is appealing, unique, and quite entertaining. The writer demonstrates a strong comedic writing voice here with some dynamic characters and witty dialogue… The writer demonstrates a clear and strong voice here, employing a solid comedic writing voice and fully immersing the reader into this world. The writer also employs nuanced dialogue that makes for an entertaining script. It provides a consistent and appealing edgy tone.”

Chicago Screenplay Awards The Loser’s Club

“The core concept can be discerned and summarized quickly and does contain novel elements that make the script stand out from others in the genre. One of these elements is the inclusion of such a diverse group of misfits who actually end up kidnapping the star quarterback. The writer gives each character a specific word/phrase/manner of speech that is relatively unique to them, which helps differentiate the characters and make each more memorable…One of the script’s most attractive qualities is the diversity at the school and the themes that bullying people who belong to these marginalized groups is wrong. “

New York International Screenplay Awards The Loser’s Club

“The script offers a very marketable premise with diverse characters and convincing world building. The plot is generally emotionally engaging, funny, and entertaining. Overall, the script's core concept has good market potential. Overall, there's a very fresh premise here that makes it stand out in its genre… The writer successfully builds this atmosphere with convincing visuals and a variety of dynamic, interesting characters.”

Reno Tahoe Screenplay Contest The Loser’s Club

“One of the script’s most attractive qualities is the fact that the victims of the intense bullying at the school have had a potential plan in place to kidnap the two most popular kids as revenge. The extremity of this matter, rather than giving the information they’ve recorded about the bullying at the school to the authorities, adds comedy to the script while emphasizing the seriousness of bullying.”