The Loser's Club

“The Loser’s Club’s strength lies in its human approach to each of its flawed characters. The writer understands the many intricate layers that a teen can possess, and never falls into tired tropes that are often so used to dehumanize this category of humans, who is so easily misunderstood. The dialogue has personality, and there’s an abundance of solid moments scattered throughout the script that are worth highlighting.

As a premise, this feels fresh and exciting, given that more often than not, the “losers” in teen films, either remain passive, or get their revenge as individuals. The idea of a group of kids standing up for themselves in this manner seems much more realistic and on par with the teen mentality, nowadays.

The actual trial takes a big portion of the script, which works to its characters’ favor, because it allows the audience to truly connect with each and every one of them. The writer also manages to provide humanity to both Tawny and Joe, even if it takes a while for them to let their guards down and become more vulnerable. On the other hand, the “losers” aren’t all painted with the same layer of victimhood, either. Trenton brings a knife with him, while Luther carries a cap gun. Though they don’t aim to actually harm any of their peers, it’s obvious that both characters carry something a bit more complex within themselves.”

“The Loser’s Club works primarily because it pairs great fundamentals in the presentation and structure of the narrative with wildly creative characters. In a script that has a fair share of surprises, the most interesting thing was the cast regardless of how large the role is. Every character has such a memorable personality or description that it makes the whole narrative appear highly original even though it adheres fairly rigidly to conventional three act structure. However, this adherence is to the narrative’s benefit as the highs and lows of the story land at the appropriate times. Out journey of change may seem familiar when laid out clinically, beat by beat. But the characters have enough personality and often more than enough complexity to their motivations to give The Loser’s Club real distinction.
The Loser’s Club succeeds because of fantastic characters and solid structure. These two qualities make for the bedrock of any good script, but this narrative has a lot of other positives on top of this. Ever escalating tension, some great moment-to- moment writing in the action description, creative dialogue – these all add up to give the impression of a very professional script. I enjoyed my time with this story because it swings for the fences with interesting plot points but gives us a reason to care about the action with nuanced characters. A good read from beginning to end. “

"The early ratings from the judges are very high for your screenplay. You're off to a great start. This screenplay is very well written and defined. You did a great job of creating so many different personalities with all of these characters. This took some planning!"

“The Loser’s Club” is a coming-of-age comedy that follows a group of high school students who kidnap their bullies when their school does nothing to punish the bullies. This premise offers a rich foundation for conflict to unfold… …each character has a distinct personality and the ensemble’s relationships with one another are rendered realistically. Dialogue is consistently conversational and the action description is evocative and memorable. Scenes build tension effectively, which allows for developments to unfold in satisfying intervals.”

“This is a really interesting script that mostly centers around a single moment of confrontation between bullies and their victims. It’s quite a strong concept but feels rooted in reality – a group of friends pushed too far and perhaps to their limit. The failure on the part of the school is tangible in their reactions to Trenton’s retaliation, but it’s much less explored and we instead get a single extended scene that provides some of the most in-depth exploration of childhood bullying ever put to screen (well, script), exploring both bullies and their own take on the events just as well as those of the ‘losers’… this was a genuinely interesting read, and something that I can’t recall ever being explored in such depth before.”

“The core premise is appealing, unique, and quite entertaining. The writer demonstrates a strong comedic writing voice here with some dynamic characters and witty dialogue… The writer demonstrates a clear and strong voice here, employing a solid comedic writing voice and fully immersing the reader into this world. The writer also employs nuanced dialogue that makes for an entertaining script. It provides a consistent and appealing edgy tone.”

“The core concept can be discerned and summarized quickly and does contain novel elements that make the script stand out from others in the genre. One of these elements is the inclusion of such a diverse group of misfits who actually end up kidnapping the star quarterback. The writer gives each character a specific word/phrase/manner of speech that is relatively unique to them, which helps differentiate the characters and make each more memorable…One of the script’s most attractive qualities is the diversity at the school and the themes that bullying people who belong to these marginalized groups is wrong. “

“The script offers a very marketable premise with diverse characters and convincing world building. The plot is generally emotionally engaging, funny, and entertaining. Overall, the script's core concept has good market potential. Overall, there's a very fresh premise here that makes it stand out in its genre… The writer successfully builds this atmosphere with convincing visuals and a variety of dynamic, interesting characters.”

“One of the script’s most attractive qualities is the fact that the victims of the intense bullying at the school have had a potential plan in place to kidnap the two most popular kids as revenge. The extremity of this matter, rather than giving the information they’ve recorded about the bullying at the school to the authorities, adds comedy to the script while emphasizing the seriousness of bullying.”